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A Very Strong Wind

A Very Strong Wind

You’re an evil person, a miserable twat.
A silver spoon baby, your mother’s your aunt.
Your dad was an asshole who sold frozen water,
and his fat ugly face was passed on to your daughter.

You attended great schools, but all your diplomas,
couldn’t land you a real man, or disguise your aromas.
He's a half man at best, and a used part time dad,
your step parenting classes must’ve just been a fad.

I hate how you look, and I hate what you say,
“Ryan would have wanted it this way”.
How would you know, you smelly fucking gash?
The only thing on your mind was saving some cash.

If I had less control, a little more off base,
I would’ve coughed up missile, and spat in your face.
But it wasn’t the time or the place for a fight,
I resent what you said, but I handled it right.

All of your money and all of your cash,
couldn’t afford you a single upgrade in class.
Both the boys hate you, and they always did,
hate you more than you love all the money you’ve hid.

‘Cause you’re an ugly half monkey, with two ugly chimps,
and the milquetoast with the pipe wrench, 
He's the king of the wimps.
I’ve got lots more to say, this was just a small sample,
I’d piss on you if you would come down off your camel.

 

— tbeaudet, Oct 28, 2007

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Boston, USA

Favorite Poets: Patti Smith, Lucinda Williams, John Prine, Bruce Springsteen, Jim Carroll, Bob Dylan, Tom Waites

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Shadow_whispers

18 years 7 months ago

Wonderful!

*claps* That was amazing! I loved it! I feel very bad for the person to whom this is dedicated. Though, if they are that bad then I suppose I shouldn't feel bad for her at all, Ne? I love it. I love the venom. I can almost feel you spitting in her face. Who knew someone who writes so sweetly could write with such hate? What a wonderful surprise!
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

18 years 7 months ago

Surprise!

You never saw this side of me before, have you? Well, just don't get on my bad side! (lol) Thanks for your review...Here's a little quiz for you....I named this "A Very Strong Wind" because it is the definition of her name. Can you figure it out?
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dbrock

18 years 7 months ago

do i sense some anger issues

do i sense some anger issues here? LOL Your words made me hate this woman & I don'e even know her! nice job!!! donna
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Linda

I actually wrote this for the boys....This is therapy. Tom
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

WOW TOM!

This was Awesome! I absolutely loved the first and last stanza, the inbetween was damn good too. Does that mean I liked all of it? *G* I think I may know who this is about, but doesn't matter as I am glad I am not this person! And to think, many say you can't express yourself in rhyme.. Liars! I give this 5 stars as it deserves it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
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Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Strong Hatred

I would've even do this to my worst enemy. Strong poem that shows some personality and character on your part. Good poem.
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 9 months ago

I can get pretty ugly

my friend!! Just cleaning up some of my older stuff, left justifying stuff I had centered which doesn't work good here, and making a few changes on the way. Glad you enjoyed. Tom
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

A Very Strong Wind

Tom, WOW I guess you got that out, because I could feel the anger creeping around on my keyboard! You did a fantastic job expressing yourself here~
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 9 months ago

Poetry is Therapy

Janice, if you could feel it, then I succeeded. Like Rett once said.. "Never piss off a poet!" Thanks for your kind review. Tom
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Damn right!

It is very dangerous to "Piss off a Poet". You never know how long their reaction will live in printed word! Well done. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Gail

well versed anger... is it about an ex-wife? I feel you went over the line when talking about her ugly kids, although I've seen ugly kids I doubt if I'd ever say it to the parents... sorry .. don't get mad please... I wouldn't want one like this directed at me... other than that I thought it was damn good... but that is just my feelings on the content.. I see no-one else has an issue with it.. very good write! Richard
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 9 months ago

Good point, Richard

I do agree that kids are off limits, and were this actually being presented to the "TWAT", that would have been ommitted. This was meant to be over the top and this was nothing more than therapy... Thanks for your comments, (and good sense). Tom
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

This was freaking funny as shit!

Such great anger structured in a quite respectful write, my friend. Oh, if I had this at a prior time in my life, I would not have been at a loss for words when I really needed them. Spectacular! Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

Fucking awesome!

But I am sorry, respectfully, we must reject your application to write Hallmark Cards. Wish there was more gutsy, honest, raw beautiful poetry like this on the site, it relates to much more than the person it was directed at, it is real poetry. all respect, Jess
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Let.It.Rain

17 years 9 months ago

THAT WAS AMAZING FROM START

THAT WAS AMAZING FROM START TO END IT WAS A RIDE, WITHOUT THESE ARMS OF MY CHAIR I'LD BE ON THE FLOOR BY NOW. THANK YOU, WOW AMAZING.
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 9 months ago

I am afraid of this type of reless for myself for I might keep

Writing until I dropped dead of writing once I got started I might not be able to stop but I do enjoy seeing some who deserves it get it and from the feelings that come off the page and land in my lap I just got to say Am glad they don't stick to me Nice write Donnie /Sinbad and if the kids turn out like her go ahead and testify to the fact ugly is as ugly does. Life is like a box on fire on your front porch do you kick it or do you stomp on it? hehe
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha

LOL...rolling here @_@_@_@_@_@_@_@_@ kk I think I'm better now...the only thing I have to say is, from a stepchild's point of view...yayayayayayayayayayayayayayaya!!! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."