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Anh Ha Long Tac bui
Sep 05, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Her Smile

Doesn’t matter

Time away

Doesn’t matter

What she says

Look at my love anyway.

 

Her smile looks like a rose

With lark singing to pose

For the eve – paradise

Flowing into my eyes,

My heart and the sky.

 

And my love vanishes

Not say a word – bye-bye

And leaves plenty of roses

For my heart and the sky.

 

(Anhha – Melbourne, Victoria, Australia)

 

— Anh Ha Long Tac bui, Sep 05, 2007

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I wonder about the irony here

We don't have larks in ausralia. A sad cynical poem with real emotional content. I feel the love was real. Sorry that the poem seemed cynical. Just my take on it. cheers, Jess
AB

Anh Ha Long Tac bui

18 years 10 months ago

Hi! Jess Have a g’day,

Hi! Jess Have a g'day, Jess! Thank you so much for your consideration and comment. I do love your comment. Once again, thanks a lot. Kindest Regards anhha

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