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Nevel
Member since April 27, 2011
Member for 15 years, 1 month
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To loneliness
The loneliness inside me,
that reigns as a tomb
and the moon burning on my tongue,
ignorant and all-knowing he laughs
the years passed, the gate-keeper
of my night, what happened
with your countenance?
Nevel’s timeline
- April 2026
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27 MonAnniversary
15 years of membership
- April 2021
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27 TueAnniversary
10 years of membership
- April 2016
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27 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
- April 2012
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27 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- July 2011
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20 WedReceived a critique
on To madness from @washing tears
"I am enjoying your letters, these lines stuck out to me "from the eyeless abyss, wide as the night my hollow eternity splintered in the heat of the animal, rise and break, uneducated force" Great piece of writing here…" -
20 WedReceived a critique
on To loneliness from @washing tears
"i feel as if we should all write to our loneliness, thank you for sharing this with us, its a haunting read that made me re read it a few times." -
19 Tue
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- June 2011
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27 MonCritiqued
"a river runs through Africa" by @CCfire
"Hi Chez, perhaps the war has left the country, but the war is still in the people, I guess that's the river-metaphor. I've got a feeling of "stranger in a strange country" by your poem, which actually reads as several p…" -
19 Sun
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18 SatCritiqued
"Hidden Lies" by @Beauty From Ashes
"Hi Kat, welcome to Neopoet, I see you've found your way. I think because your poem is personal, it's good as it is, any desire to improve it; just follow your heart. Greetings, Erwin (aka The Cannibalistic Butterfly; a…" -
12 SunCritiqued
"Demons in the Rough-(Shark Pool submission)." by @docmaverick
"Workshop Critique: The Shark Pool is open Hi Doc, First your rhyme-pattern: +/a/b - +/a/b - +/c/d - +/c/D - +/e/f - +/e/g - +/h/d - +/h/D ("occurs" doesn't rhyme with "offers"). I felt that in your poem you used too man…" -
11 SatReceived a critique
on The ballad of a windy Spring from @scribbler
"I really enjoyed reading this.Stanza 2 is in my opinion not just the heart but the soul of this poem. !st stanza is a bit unclear in message to me, but I'm sure you will "fix" it better than I could...............scribb…" -
10 FriCritiqued
"Shark Pool test" by @weirdelf
"workshop critique: The Shark Pool is open still working, also, I'm still in. Greetings, Erwin (a poem a day keeps the doctor away)" -
09 ThuNew follower
@Ink Artist
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07 TueReceived a critique
on Too white, too dark, just eggs (Shark Pool Submission) from @themoonman
"but according to the revisions tab you've revised this poem eight times since your first submission, and if you plan on revising again for a final critique perhaps you should say so in the title ... so's to avoid any mi…" -
07 TueReceived a critique
on Too white, too dark, just eggs (Shark Pool Submission) from @Kailashana2
""While a poem doesn't have to be totally transparent [heaven forfend!] if the intent is totally unrecognised by the reader it is either a complete epiphanal success or, more likely, a failure." This is pure gold, Jess…" -
07 TueReceived a critique
on Too white, too dark, just eggs (Shark Pool Submission) from @weirdelf
"I felt the same. While a poem doesn't have to be totally transparent [heaven forfend!] if the intent is totally unrecognised by the reader it is either a complete epiphanal success or, more likely, a failure." -
07 TueReceived a critique
on Too white, too dark, just eggs (Shark Pool Submission) from @themoonman
"I see you've revised this poem, but it would appear that you've only moved the lines around a bit, changed a couple of images, which in my opinion, hasn't helped the clarity for the reader at all. I don't feel I should…" -
07 Tue
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06 MonReceived a critique
on Too white, too dark, just eggs (Shark Pool Submission) from @docmaverick
"...I'm in agreement with the others that stated that this piece is very imaginative, it IS ! I also believe it to be very "visual", if you will. Freeverse is not necessarily my forte,, but I also don't think that "freev…" -
06 MonCritiqued
"the last swallow" by @CCfire
"Beautiful Chez, this is perfected balanced between images and emotions...your imagery is always so refreshing, I think its characterises your poetry. "with you found flowers on the edge of lips" such a stunning line…" -
06 MonCritiqued
"the last swallow" by @CCfire
"Beautiful Chez, this is perfected balanced between images and emotions...your imagery is always so refreshing, I think its characterises your poetry. "with you found flowers on the edge of lips" such a stunning line…" -
03 Fri
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01 WedCritiqued
"Last Night (Shark Pool Submission)" by @themoonman
"Workshop: The Shark Pool is open First, after reading your poem, I was wondering whether your piece is fiction or based on reality. I found the discrepancy between the story-line and showing your emotions too big. A few…" - May 2011
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29 Sun
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23 MonNew follower
@Janice Pearce
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21 Sat
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14 Sat
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14 Sat
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03 Tue
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03 TueFirst critique offered
on "i, love and you" by @CCfire
- April 2011
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30 Sat
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29 FriFirst publication
Inside the mouth of relativity
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29 Fri
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27 WedJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 2 days later.
About Me
About me
Hi, I'm a guy from Holland. I started writing poetry about 5 years ago, to express my feelings and thoughts, to revail what lives inside me. I had already written short stories by means of therapy, discovered that prose didn't cover my wishes, and slowly I switch to poetry. i enjoy to write form-poetry, the Celtic poem-forms, free verse, haiku. 'till now I have 2 small self-published booklets by lulu.com, and a few poems are published into an international magazine. Never really content with my poems, I keep learning new ways of imagery, forms etc.
My life: after an crappy childhood I had several jobs, worked into stores, working places, ships, behind a packet-machine, in gardens, followed a course in highschool, currently studying for assitant-vet. I lives with two cats, love nature, science, languages, history, Chinese martial arts, playing chess.
Location: Veenendaal in The Netherlands, NLD
Favorite Poets
T.S.Eliot
Sylvia Plath
Anne Sexton
Rumi
Hakim Sanai
C.S. Lewis
e.e. Cumming
Tolkien
Basho
Rilke
etc etc.
Recent Work
To loneliness
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To madness
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The ballad of a windy Spring
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Haiku #9
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A private matter
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The effects of stale walls
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Bridging the gap
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Inside the mouth of relativity
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Contest Wins
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Workshops
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| Shark Pool (initial workshop) | (syllabus) | Shark Pool | Started 2011-05-16 | Concluded |