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The manifest of vitality, rewritten
Can you dream about the dead?
I ask the sunset, while she fleshes
at night and settles in shadow-colours.
Can you digest this bony reality,
like a dog, like a buddha, like a cross
on a Sunday morning?
I ask Schrödinger's Cat, while he purrs like
a drunken gutar, and pointed to a vision
in the harsh sky.
The savannah trembles in agony,
for the big Subjective awakes.
How to frame the honey-coloured clouds?
I ask Yggradsil, the tree with the many leaves;
he didn't reply, but sinks in a prayer,
made of a substance I never thought before.
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Style/Type: Free verse
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Comments
Candlewitch
14 years 11 months ago
Hello,
Pleased to meet you! Great title, by the way. I don't know who all those people are that you mentioned so i suppose I will have to look them up, to satisfy my curiosity. Thanks for expanding my mind! My favorite lines are:
I ask Schrödinger's Cat, while he purrs like
a drunken gitar, and pointed to a vision
in the harsh sky.
suggestion: I think gitar should be guitar.
Love the ending lines. see you around neo!
always, Cat
Nevel
14 years 11 months ago
thank you Cat for your
thank you Cat for your comment...ahh, a small typo, I still think in Dutch I think. For the names in the poem, Schrödinger was a quantum fysicus tried to prove the paradoxal nature of the quatum mechanic by setting up a test with a cat (not a real one)..Yggradril is the world-tree from the Nordish mythology, which connect all worlds, that of the gods, men, giants. Greetings, Erwin
(a poem a day keeps the doctor away)
Janice Pearce
14 years 11 months ago
Nevel
I enjoyed reading this one from you. Great writing!
Nevel
14 years 11 months ago
Thank you Janice
Thank you Janice