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devoejack24
Member since May 28, 2026
Member for 1 month, 22 days
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Bury a Giant
How do you bury a giant?
corral a myth—
wipe a slate clean.
How do you
change belief,
worship in peace—
censure false prophets.
How do you
impugn the diabolical,
Bear false witness
Betray a neighbour—
Attack. Abuse. Disown
Can you teach me?
Mother.
Father.
devoejack24’s timeline
- June 2026
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04 ThuCritiqued
"The Dead Mesa Requiem " by @RJ Bear
"the second line 4th stanza i think you get take out "blackened" better rhythm. same wit some the articles "of", "the" ruins the rhythm love the story its fun" -
04 ThuCritiqued
"Shrouded Shelley" by @Blue-eyed Bolla
"some really beautiful rhymes and images. I could never do this. my fav is the last line. some rhyming is awkward" -
04 ThuReceived a critique
on Bury a Giant from @Geezer
"that I don't need to say; "Do unto Other as You Would Have Them do Unto You". Because it would make perfect sense, and since when is the "Human race " a sensible thing? I share your grief at the greed of the world. We a…" -
04 ThuReceived a critique
on Bury a Giant from @patrickgadoury
"That ending is amazing. Honestly, I don’t know that I can critique this one much. Most of these lines feel like they can’t really be changed. The only section that maybe hit me a little less was “How do you / change bel…" -
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03 WedCritiqued
"Where is Home?" by @hippiemoon
"I like it as well, but some of your lines are too long. there are breath breaks your missing eg: riding bikes in bikinis around our island. the natural breath is after "bikinis" . i love the opening line and as a person…" -
03 WedReceived a critique
on Values from @patrickgadoury
"I like this piece a lot. My favorite two lines are the first two. There is no doubt you're cutting close to the bone writing this one. I have had this thought and feeling. To me, when I read the last sentence it leaves…" -
02 TueCritiqued
"Dirty fingernails" by @ida girl
"i don't think i understand "hearing taught...hark..." it's outside of the rest of your images or rather its jarring.. love 'dirty fingernails caress the cross"" -
02 Tue
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02 TueReceived a critique
on A Requiem from @patrickgadoury
"It feels like you changed more than the first line here. Although I didn't go back and check. This feels much more like a finished piece. "flushed pink—salt tears" empowers the lines below and above it. "A requiem vigil…" -
01 MonCritiqued
"The Frenglishman" by @patrickgadoury
"enjoyed. . a tale of two consciosness's(sp) i get the feeling of twins out of sync. but i love the jouney. certtainly love the resolution of tension in the last stanaza. p.s thx for the nice commen ts on Near and Far. p…" -
01 MonNew follower
@patrickgadoury
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01 Mon
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01 MonFirst publication
A Requiem
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01 Mon
- May 2026
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31 SunCritiqued
"Heart's rescue plan " by @Tigger Kaz
"i think a harder look at images; distilling them as it were, could benefit this piece. sometimes the musicality disappears i so me word choices.. still some nice images and enjoyable read." -
29 FriCritiqued
"Seduction ever rife with explicitly sexual..." by @Jane A. Rug
"I will read this poem again and probably a few more times. First impression is that it is random dictionary words to look intelligent. If it is about erotic writing it is the least erotic thing i have read. Perhaps it i…" -
29 FriCritiqued
"Seduction ever rife with explicitly sexual..." by @Jane A. Rug
"I will read this poem again and probably a few more times. First impression is that it is random dictionary words to look intelligent. If it is about erotic writing it is the least erotic thing i have read. Perhaps it i…" -
29 FriFirst critique offered
on "My Last Rhyme" by @1738mary0miller
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28 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 4 days later.
About Me
About me
I have always been a writer, in that I dabbled, but it has only been since I retired that I have begun to dedicate myself to creative writing. in general. I have a very old BA in English lit but believe me I have forgotten most of what i learned. At this time I don't know a metaphor from a split infinitive. I basically write what comes to my mind and then I read and rewrite. My poems are for the most part Imagistic. I don't right with theme in mind. I'm not attempting to explore weighty philosophical, moral and ethical, or psychological issues. I leave interpretation and or enjoyment up to the reader. In July I am enrolled in a four day workshop for fiction so I am busy putting my portfolio together. I may not participate a lot to begin with but i will in the near future. This is exactly the kind of group I have been looking for.
Thanks for reading thi long bio
Jack
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