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A Requiem

I hear through our tears

a litany of  twisted betrayal,

your smooth wet cheek

flushed pink—salt tears

on crumpled cotton sheets.

Candle lit shadows three

A requiem vigil for two.

 

 

 

— devoejack24, Jun 01, 2026

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: CAN

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Geezer

Geezer

1 day 6 hours ago

once broken, never fits back…

once broken, never fits back together the same way.
The title is good, it gets to the heart of the matter. 
Your language use is equally so; plain, simple and unadorned. 
I thought the implications were clear, the relationship is done... maybe...
~ Geezer