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Bryan
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So Glad to Be with You
“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk.
Wind our way through the town, we
were born here, married, raised children.
Strolling past the cemetery holding our parents,
Emily comments on the lovely statue of St. Michael.
“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk.
Sitting on the bench under the elm tree
looking across to the playground where we
watched our children grow and learn cooperation,
Emily comments on the stately statue of George Washington.
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“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk.
Down to the river where we swam as children
sitting on the fallen log where sixty years ago we sat
and I proposed and Emily completed me,
Emily comments on the rustic covered bridge.
And every day with Emily continues to complete me.
Bryan’s timeline
- May 2022
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17 TueAnniversary
10 years of membership
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17 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
- May 2013
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17 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- June 2012
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01 FriReceived a critique
on So Glad to Be with You from @loved
"“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.” “Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.” That said we go for a walk.... then throughout our lives we talk... both together now Emily says You first listen to me.. lovely Emily.. A…" - May 2012
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31 ThuReceived a critique
on So Glad to Be with You from @phxdreams
"Very powerful write! ..thank you so much for allowing me to read this." -
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26 SatReceived a critique
on So Glad to Be with You from @judyanne
"this brought a lump to my throat the emotion is raw in this poem the repetition so effective, especially the ‘that said we go for a walk’ and that last line, well... ‘and every day with Emily continues to complete me’…" -
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25 FriReceived a critique
on Lobster Boats from @loved
"Complicating poetry then twas okay there wasn't much else to do or say . .today there are scores of hobbies and games on the Internet to play can't we all have our own say in simpler nuances if I may so say ..... my mas…" -
25 FriReceived a critique
on Lobster Boats from @judyanne
"i liked the way you used that in anita, where the mood was sombre but imo this one needs to be pretty and bouncy to deliver the motion of the ocean - just me though... love judy xxx" -
25 FriReceived a critique
on Lobster Boats from @judyanne
"triolets – I love them but ‘Lobster boats at anchor sway ‘ and ‘Dancing on the surging bay’ each have only seven syllables and ‘To the rhythm of the tidal swell’ has nine – I suggest you lose ‘the’ before ‘rhythm’ the m…" -
25 FriCritiqued
"Alzheimer's" by @phxdreams
"I'm not a free verse fan (but I live in the real world and know it is the "form" of choice.) You bring the reader into the situation. I have a couple of Alzheimers poems and know they are a difficult subject. Well done." -
24 ThuReceived a critique
on Lobster Boats from @phxdreams
"You can feel the poem ...these are the poems I love!" -
24 ThuCritiqued
"opee nee yawn!" by @temidayo
"Unless I am not getting the poem at all I think you want to use they're rather than their. I enjoy the play with the title. Bryan" -
24 ThuCritiqued
"Distant (constructive feedback ws) Updated" by @Candlewitch
"It flowed well on the first read. There is a typo in the last stanza. I agree with Mark. While the subject is a cad I'm not sure s/he would be seen as ruthless (other than by the narrator.) Thanks for the read Bryan" -
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21 MonCritiqued
"THE COFFEE IS COLD" by @Linda Moses
"I scanned the comments and did not see it. James Thurber wrote about the delightful Walter Mitty not Middy. Certainly an easy error to make since most pronounce it Middy. Thank you for bring ole Walter to mind. I loved…" -
21 MonCritiqued
"Strange Mobility" by @Kailashana2
"I did get whiplash. You had me wandering down the center line (I even saw the black line that separates the yellows) on a 4 lane blacktop. then ..... S U D D E N L Y...I'm in a meadow with clover. I love haiku and this…" -
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21 MonCritiqued
"THE COFFEE IS COLD" by @Linda Moses
"Linda -I'm not sure if this was where you were going -but another stanza could erase the doubt if you like the suggestion. You have here a metaphor of life. We start out warm robust and full of flavor and end up cold an…" -
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17 ThuJoined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.
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15 TueHighest posting month
May 2012 — 6 poems
- September 2008
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01 MonFirst publication
Fracture
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01 MonFirst critique offered
on "Mother Nature's Child" by @Rett
About Me
About me
Poetry in form is my passion. My greatest influence are the imagists. I am also a photographer. Nature is my favorite subject. When shooting man made objects I look for the Japanese concept of 'aware."
Location: Western Mass, USA
Favorite Poets
Adelaide Crapsey
Basho
Issa
Buson
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So Glad to Be with You
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Lobster Boats
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