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Your Love

Your love
I seek
you are mine
within reach
searching you
on every beach
come love me
I'm within reach''

SEARCHING INSTEAD OF SEEKING HOWZ IT NOW STAN AND GEE

— lovedly, Sep 06, 2021

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Critiques

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 9 months ago

ok

keep clicking ur CLOCK
GEE

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scribbler

4 years 9 months ago

hi loved

Line 5 is kinda off to me. Maybe change search to seeking? Otherwise enjoyable

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 9 months ago

I guess...

there is nothing philosophical about it after-all. You're just a horny old goat! Yes, trade search for seeking, feels better that way. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

lovedly

4 years 9 months ago

I WILL ABIDE

with you and stan coz u both are masters but give it a second thought as UNREQUITED LOVE NOT HORNY passing time composed this when I WAS what you say GEE
horror knee
yesterday I LOST MY PW today I have noted somewhere HAPPY DAY

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 9 months ago

Yes...

I see the unrequited love part, and yes, it sounds better. Sorry, didn't mean to be flip with my critique. Short and sweet, I see you on the beach, lounging on a blanket, sipping a cool drink with your dark shades and roaming eyes. ~ Geez.
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