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Jun 23, 2014
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You Must Have Looked Good
You must have looked so good when you were young!
You still have shapely legs,
high cheekbones,
sparkling eyes,
a mischievous smile,
a neat figure,
slim neck,
strong shoulders...
You must have looked so good, but I can't remember you
as your were, unless, too occasionally,
I take down a photo album from its dusty shelf,
and there you are in your young glory,
making me feel that other men
must have envied me then
and perhaps they do now!
— Robert Melliard, Jun 23, 2014
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raj
12 years 1 month ago
Hi Robert
All I can say after reading this post is that his is a very innocent and honest acknowledgement of the elements of love which made the chemistry work for you... I appreciate your humility in doing so without male chauvinism... i liked it for sure...
Regards,
Robert Melliard
12 years 1 month ago
Glad you liked
this rather simple poem. It certainly seems to sum up my wife's enduring beauty, for me at least.
Best wishes,
Robert.
lovedly
12 years ago
u share ur admiration of ur wife's love and beauty
but too much use of'''' the'''
lessons the charm
no harm
edit with ur own arm
don't mind me
I comment
like cement
Robert Melliard
12 years ago
Thanks
for your comment, which is not really as hard as cement. Repetition is a useful tool when writing poems, but is easily overused. I have modified this poem following your advice.
Best wishes,
Robert.
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