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Sep 03, 2025
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Words Fail Again
Like a candle dead in the dark
A lamp light snuffed out
Words are like mythical birds
Ones that can’t fly
Words born to walk
Wingless dodos just fall over and die.
Like disobedient children, ones we can’t control
Today my words fail me, all withered and old
Whereas the day before yesterday and many years ago
Like a mountain stream, the words always flow.
Nothing comes out the faucet
Dry river’s just a dribble
Hand writing reduced to a scribble
That’s just the way it goes
No poetry its just prose
Now turn off the tap
With a kind quip
And a huge whip
I’m done
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
3 weeks 3 days ago
Sen99
Nice job with similes all through. I 'm not sure I've seen the dodos before thus I had to google it though I could have a vision of it in your words.
I especially like the last stanza , but found the third line a bit ambiguous.
"Sky writing reduced to a scribble"
As I think it's only me, I have to wait to see what others have to say.
And by the way, I don't think your words have really failed.
Thank you for sharing
Sen99
3 weeks 3 days ago
Hello Rula
The poem is just about writers block which happens to me
Dodos were birds that never took flight hence a simile as you said.
3 verse maybe a weak rhyme, could change it
Thanks again for your comments