Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Jul 26, 2024
⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
Why,why,why?
Why does your loss
Feel.this
Visceral,
After!
All!
This!
Time!
Let me go.
Leave me be.
Die.
Once.
Not every day.
— kowque, Jul 26, 2024
Share this poem
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
neopoet
1 year 10 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
It is not feasible to offer feedback.
Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to https://www.neopoet.com/contact
Rula
1 year 10 months ago
Kow
Few words that reflect too much anguish. I can feel the pain.
I thought you may be don't need the period after "be"
I read it like one statement
"Let me go.
Leave me be
Die
Once."
"Visceral " a typo that needs your attention.
Thank you for sharing.
kowque
1 year 10 months ago
Thank you
The typos are an occupational hazard of using English...when it's literally a third language
I'll fix it.
Thank you for leaving a comment
kowque
1 year 10 months ago
Forgot to add
#MuchLove
Lavender
1 year 10 months ago
Why?
Oh, Koki,
This is felt deep in the gut. Nicely done.
Thank you,
L
kowque
1 year 10 months ago
My purple flower
Thank you