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C. Wolff
C. Wolff
Jul 22, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Water Nymphs

In waters deep,

I did forgo,

My worldly life,

As they bestowed,

Upon my tender heart,

Their love,

A fond farewell,

To the world above,

So in their arms,

At their behest,

I gave my love,

For eternal rest.

— C. Wolff, Jul 22, 2022

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Last Few Words: Lured into the deep.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 10 months ago

As old school...

as any I've heard lately. I love the simple flow and the language fits perfectly! Nothing I could add, would make this better.~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 10 months ago

I love this piece!

The simplicity is very catchy! I would say, you did a very fine work.

Beautiful!
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S

scribbler

3 years 10 months ago

Hi

I like how you saved the rhyme until the end to give emphasis

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years 10 months ago

Sirens

Just amazing. So many images come to mind. This has been written about and captured in recorded music countless times since before humans wrote stuff down. I love it. Geezer is correct, I would not mess with this, I’d just convolute it.

Really impressed,
Tim