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Oct 10, 2011
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Untitled Musings
If the day
contemplated a year
then,
I have lived lifetimes
in an hour.
if a moment
could have moulded me,
it was this one
when our atoms danced
at first contact,
the static rubbed
at uncomfortable,
I felt the sting that said
‘stand sharp’
I watched the blue
of your eyes
cloud with a storm,
your fingers twitched
as I unfolded my wings,
burnt, torn and scarred,
you raised your hands
and with the balm of your palms
my wings were bandaged
soothed
healed
I now soar
as you watch
I fly the tempest
that in your eyes spreads,
now I ride the lightning
embraced in a thunderclap
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Timbo
13 years 11 months ago
Beautiful write, from someone
Beautiful write, from someone very talented.
Hope you are keeping well these days,
take care,
Tim
raj
13 years 11 months ago
JayCee
where were you?..welcome back ...nice to read this one....why did you get stuck up with a title? will keep tab on this one to see what title you come up with...i will scratch my head too and see if i can come up with something...
much love..