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Sep 12, 2014
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You have the expert hands of a concert pianist
and I want you to play up and down me
like the ivory keys of a baby grand.
Lightly.
Ever so lightly.
Feeling, learning every part of me.
And then growing in intensity.
Urgency.
Until reaching culmination.
Fill me with your music.
— AnnaNJ, Sep 12, 2014
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Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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alidzain
11 years 8 months ago
Hi Anna
can tell me more about this poem? I think "Request" will be a better title for this poem but it is up to you. your call. On the whole, its a good write.
Alid
raj
11 years 8 months ago
Hi Anna
Analogy of Piano keys used very effectively for a very sensuous and stimulating sequence without being too loud and not at all amorous. If you are searching for a suitable title do let me know,. In the mean time I will try to figure out something.
Regards,
Ian.T
11 years 8 months ago
Anna
Now you must listen to the ABBA song "Andante" it is as your poem lol.
One of theirs I love it is written with feelings as your piece,
Yours Ian.T