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Nov 20, 2014
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The Tiny Dream
eyes crossed
tease dotted
stripes lost
tossed
and besotted
the bees lost
the eyes have it
blind as they may be
— Simon Smythe, Nov 20, 2014
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
Esker
11 years 6 months ago
visual..is only a portion of the cortextual chase...
the honey
sweet as it is
can be found with the odd sting
and the most difficult of defense
thank you!
weirdelf
9 years 5 months ago
man, your work is very hard to critique,
as is Esker's.
Your wordchoice, wordcrafting and inimicable style make suggestions superfluous.
That's cool, I can just sit back and enjoy.
Ta.