Twix your God and the essence of all things, is a domain we shall call Heaven, because it is too beautiful for any other word.
That we shall dwell within this domain in perfection, is a task that we must try to achieve.
There shall be only a love of an energy that will eclipse all other things, there we shall be free of all man made stupidity,
Yours as always, Ian

Rula

11 years 6 months ago

Ian

totally agree. I like how you've said it all.

wesley snow

11 years 6 months ago

By all means should you experiment.

On anything.
The language you mimic is Old English.

Rula

11 years 6 months ago

Thank you sir!

Like it? :)

judyanne

11 years 6 months ago

i love this little shortie Rula

but 'soul' and ''all'' is a weak rhyme (imo)
lol - it may be my aussie accent, but i think
''whilst hearts shall tell the whole.' might work better ???

this little beautie trips awesomely over the tongue when read aloud
love judy
xxx

Rula

11 years 6 months ago

or it might be

my Arabic accent judyanne.
Let me think abt. this for some time. I am really happy with it at the moment.
I am happy you're back to pick on mine. (smiles)

wesley snow

11 years 6 months ago

Yes of course I like it.

I love all that you write even with the occasional flaw. It's a good poem even without the new language.

Bella Cicerona

11 years 6 months ago

Excellent

I like how concisely you wrote this poem. A moral in verse--very lovely