The Things We Don’t Say

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

The poem handles a genuinely important subject with evident care, and the closing couplet lands with reasonable force: "some battles live where eyes can't reach" earns its place because it shifts the image inward in a way that feels slightly fresher than what precedes it. The rhyme scheme is consistent and the poem moves with a steady, readable rhythm, which gives it an accessible quality suited to its theme.

The main challenge is that the poem relies heavily on phrases that have circulated so widely they no longer create much sensation in the reader: "broken eyes," "carry wars behind their skin," "hide the ache," "bend before they break." Because these images arrive already familiar, the emotional weight they are meant to carry tends to pass through the reader rather than settle. The poem is saying something true, but it says it in ways a reader has already heard many times. A concrete, specific detail — a particular gesture, object, or moment of observed silence — would anchor the abstraction and give the reader something genuinely new to feel rather than simply agree with. Even one such detail, placed near the center of the poem, would give the surrounding generalities more power.

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Rather a common theme amongst poets, lacking the right words to communicate feelings. Ironic, I suppose. Good rhythm. If you're looking for suggestions - beneath their skin, some battles rage. Miss out So from penultimate line. 

 not about to try and school you on that last line and the rhyme. Evidently, the line is meant to bring the whole of the poem together and reiterate that the battles are not always evident. Welcome to Neo. I think you will do fine here. 
~ Geezer. 
 

hey my friend my name is trouble 

this poem is a hit a homerun  i can't Critique you grammar because im learning myself but I loved the flow and the rhythm it was easy to read and the rhymes added a extra visual content 

good reading 

trouble