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Teething, 5/15/26

It's Jaws Clamp Down On

A Pure and Innocent Girl

Immediate End

Soaking the Floor with a Pool

Of Distinct Red Gloss

The Weekend Begins Today

— JoeyRoberts2028, May 15, 2026

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Draft

About the Author

Region, Country: GA, USA

Favorite Poets: George Carlin, Michael Anthony

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Critiques

GothAngelPoetry

GothAngelPoetry

1 month 1 week ago

This is interesting…

This is interesting. Different but I like it.Well written good job 

Geezer

Geezer

1 month 1 week ago

Beware...

 of chomping on "pure innocence", 
there is a Killer that you don't want to tangle with here.
He is the defender of those who are raped, and victims guilty
of nothing more than innocence.

I'm not sure that you have done a good thing, but you have piqued his interest. He has been bored lately. Sooo, I'd change my diet to those that have the sweetest meat; rapists, child-molesters and murderers of the weak and helpless. 

So yeah, we noticed you. ~ Geezer.
 

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