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Dec 23, 2010
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Starlight
STARLIGHT
For you, my love, this Christmas time,
I only have this simple rhyme.
Though you, my love, deserve much more,
(You are the one that I adore)
If all the skies were empty; black,
No moon or stars to light your track,
Then I could set some sparkling stars
To light your way where 'ere you are.
And following your paths you'd see...
That every one leads back to me.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
mand
14 years 10 months ago
So sweet and romantic.
Lovely sentiments, brilliant rhyming and meter.
Loved reading this one.
Love Mand xxxxxx
Tam the Chanter
14 years 10 months ago
romance
Glad you liked it, Mand. It should save me a fortune in christmas presents lol.
Merry Christmas !!
Ian xxx
Kailashana2
14 years 10 months ago
Lol. (Expect her to expect a
Lol. (Expect her to expect a present under the tree.)
Lovely thought...."every path leads back to me." How long have you been married? Bless you both.
hugs,
Anna
Tam the Chanter
14 years 10 months ago
lucky
At a party in Edinburgh, 1968, I met Anne. We were married in September 1969. thanks for the kind words Anna,
Merry Christmas !!!
Ian xx
Tam the Chanter
14 years 10 months ago
Paths
Shirl, thank you for the encouraging words. I hope Santa is good to you
MERRY CHRISTMAS !!!
Love Ian xxx
Tam the Chanter
14 years 10 months ago
sonnet
I would sonnetise it if it flowed freely, but it seems to have the life-span that it has and I really don't want to pad it out . Thanks for the interest though and the suggestion. Really glad you like it,
Ian