Lavender

Aug 04, 2025 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

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The ceiling fan
swirls out a soft
tic
tic
tic
tic.

I am cool
in this lonely
chair.

— Lavender, Aug 04, 2025

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Does loneliness ever feel comfort?

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Critiques

Geezer

11 months 2 weeks ago

I really...

get this one. I am often alone at night; my sleeping habits are such that my wife and I cannot sleep in the same room. I have my T.V. on 24/7 so that I don't have to be alone in the quiet of the night. Nice stuff, ~ Geez.

Lavender

11 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Geezer,

Yes, a little noise can silence the "aloneness" we may feel, especially in the middle of the night. In this moment, I was physically comfortable, nice and cool on a hot summer night, yet very lonely. Aah, well...

Thank you!

Rula

11 months 2 weeks ago

Single

I can hear it and get the feeling.

Isn't it amazing how we can get it all compacted in such a succinct piece

Nice stuff dear friend

Always in my thoughts as a dear friend 💕

Lavender

11 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Rula,

Yes, that tiny "tic tic" whisper from the fan was so noticeable during the long, lonely night. Not much more to say about it at the time.

Thank you for always sending positive energy!

Ruby Lord

11 months 2 weeks ago

Hi Lavender,In this one, you…

Hi Lavender,
In this one, you've stripped everything back, What remains is the sense of being alone. No sentiment, just stoic detachment. It works because you've pared the poem down to its bare essentials and delivered your unflinching honesty. Ruby xx

Lavender

11 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Ruby,

The mood seemed ironic - physically very comfortable, but the loneliness was almost overbearing and evident while noticing the soft noise of the ceiling fan.

Thank you for reading!

Michael Anthony

11 months 2 weeks ago

I love the brevity and in…

I love the brevity and in-the-moment capture here, L! Our ceiling fan makes the same noise too, so I really connected with this piece - well done!

Lavender

11 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Michael,

Thank you for reading! Sometimes that soft sound of the fan is soothing. Sometimes it's a little sad. Dunno...

Thanks, again!

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