Resting

i started resting
i began to fail
am use to speed
why am i slow now
i rather masturbate myself to sleep and fuck my dreams
i hate snails for what they stand for
God is not teaching me patience.

— obidi ojochide, Aug 01, 2017

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , abuja

Critiques

Barbara Writes

8 years 10 months ago

Hi

Interesting poetic theme
Tho your poem is simplistic in form and rhythm however descriptive image of resting is vague and subtle beneath your attitude of up with a God not answering your prayer. Keep writing and expressing your poetry

obidi ojochide

8 years 10 months ago

thank you for the review

thank you for the review babara, looking forward to hear or rather read more reviews from you.

Barbara Writes

8 years 10 months ago

Hi

You're welcome
I'm looking forward to reading more from you

lovedly

8 years 10 months ago

music|photography|pharmacist|Leo|single|music|photography|pharma

music = lyrical
photography =love of nature
pharmy =treatment when needed

LEO =SEXY you openly have above stated.... msbt/fck
single =wrong place for invitation

flash fictions we can see
hopefully all will welcome thee
I keep my fingers crossed
reading ur first master's piece

goods of luck poet
to thee
soonly you will read me
as that is a requirement of this site only

obidi ojochide

8 years 10 months ago

thank u so much lovedly, that

thank u so much lovedly, that just a summary of who i am... thank u for creating time to acess my work... God bless u real good

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