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Jun 24, 2011
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rain
i.
you drew clouds
under my feet
to break my fall
only light
this side
of creation
salmon skies
embraced
your tenderness
ii.
I heard
your heart
calling
only love
will show
the way
let us
reconcile
this passion
before
it turns
to rain
and earth
swallows
our tears
goodbye
goodbye
we meet again.
— Kailashana2, Jun 24, 2011
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Last Few Words: Thanks Raj.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Rough draft
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raj
15 years 1 month ago
ahhhhhhhhhh,,,i loved these
ahhhhhhhhhh,,,i loved these lines
salmon skies
embraced
your tenderness
magics02
15 years 1 month ago
Anna
Just wonderful the feeling and vision I got from this piece of work of yours. I meant to ask you before do you have a book out? If not get busy:)
Love Mona
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