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Sep 02, 2025
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Pure Emotion
One pure emotion is not nearly enough
Our hearts are filled with much more stuff
Feelings that often evade the mind
Are often those that we cannot find
There are no signs we can clearly see
Only feelings that belong to me
A baby born with sparkling eyes
A smile, a laugh, gurgling sighs
A wedding with your family in tow
Creating havoc in the pews below
A casket with a beloved parent inside
Bring thoughts that can never be denied
These feelings and thoughts with such devotion
Are created in our minds with pure emotion
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
1 month ago
Hello Clentin
Totally agree... The ending was a bit abrupted for me, but I cant find a better to improve. It might also be only me
Nice job!
Clentin
1 month ago
Thank you for reading and comments!
Thank you for reading and comments. I will review the last stanza and see what I can do to improve the ending.
Thank you!
Clentin
1 month ago
1
Thank you very much!
Words Ablaze
2 weeks 6 days ago
I liked the two images you…
I liked the two images you painted for me, a parent in casket and a wedding with family around, even the one about the new born i would have loved you pick one and milk it dry of emotion, distill it, concentrate it till it was so pungent emotionally it chokes me up.But I enjoyed it nonetheless, especially the rhyme and rhythm. Thank you.
Clentin
2 weeks 6 days ago
Thank you for reading and…
Thank you for reading and comments