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Pretty Good
Across Multiverses
Somewhere out in the world right now
A woman is opening the door
Getting bad news as she holds her children
While somewhere in a different universe
She is welcoming her husband home
And maybe somewhere in the multiverse
He is still searching for her…
Somewhere in the world right now
A child is experiencing hunger pains
The war has taken both parents
In the meantime, in another universe
Mom and dad are safe at home
And maybe in a parallel world
Mom is in the kitchen singing songs
And dad is writing poetry under a tree…
Somewhere on earth today
Friends are in a classroom exchanging ideas
While at the same time in another universe
They’re laying on the grass in a field
Looking up at the sky dreaming dreams
But in another world, they are astronauts in space
Just passing Jupiter’s moons…
Right now, in another world
Call it heaven or paradise
Renee is holding her child with a smile
Sitting next to her wife on the sofa watching T.V.
And maybe Alex is laughing with family and friends
At a bar after another hard day of saving lives
And maybe all those we’ve lost in this world
Are somewhere across the multiverse
Living happily…
Yeah, I’d like to think that
And I think that would be pretty good
About This Poem
Last Few Words: For Renee, Alex, George, Breonna and many others.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Critiques
Lavender
1 month ago
Pretty Good
Hello, Wally,
Love this. Such empathy and compassion. What healing thoughts in those final stanzas.
One of my favorites of yours - so far.
Thank you!
L
Candlewitch
4 weeks ago
Dear Wally,
So many worlds and limitless possibilities. Your poem took me along for the ride. Thank you very much ;) my favorite lines are:
"And maybe all those we’ve lost in this world
Are somewhere across the multiverse
Living happily…"
fondly, Cat