prescience

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

The poem's strongest move is the opening diptych of the two eyes, where one "foretells a heavy shadow / where cadence falls" and the other "drifts / among unmade timber." The contrast is earned rather than merely stated, and "unmade timber" is a quietly arresting image — wood that has not yet become anything, a future still formless. The closing pivot also works: the argument that unknowing is what keeps us whole arrives with enough pressure behind it that it does not feel like a retreat from the title's promise, but an honest complication of it.

The section where prescience is invited to "name its price, / the place, / the hour" is the poem's least resolved moment. The staggered indentation signals that something is being dramatized spatially on the page, but the three nouns — price, place, hour — feel generic beside the specificity of "unmade timber" and "low whispers in the wall." If that central passage could find one concrete, unexpected detail to anchor it — the way "unmade timber" anchors the opening — the poem's architecture would hold more evenly from start to finish. As it stands, the middle sags slightly just before the poem needs to gather force for its turn.

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I liked it. The verbiage and flow I found intriguing definitely wanted to find out what was coming next. 
So I’m definitely a novice here. My don’t come with any real weight, but I will say that I really enjoyed it. As I read it, everything sounded really great. To be honest, my first thought was “well now what’s he trying to say?” So I had to go back and study on it to really determine the meaning of what was being said.  However, for me I think that’s one of the cool things about poetry. I enjoy reading something that initially sounds or may seem like it’s saying one thing but the longer you look or think about it, a deeper often even different meaning emerges. Now I could have altogether interpreted all of this wrong, but that’s my opinion of it and I liked it.
Unfortunately, I’m limited on my complementary abilities when it comes to the poetry because some of it still goes over my head but again, I thought it was great.

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This helps me to  I still have quite a ways to go before I am the new Edgar or 
Shakespeare! Lol

Thanks for sharing
Rob