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Nov 12, 2013
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when politicos come a'knockin'
power lusting
wielding rightousness as a badge
indignation as a weapon,
be forewarned
the future is the past
the pendulum swings left to right
and back again
a Poe pit mechanism
slicing the spoils
pitiless as their gods
extorting amens
lock your doors
better fire or flood
than politicos,
crying
for money
or blood
— brittle light, Nov 12, 2013
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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eightmenout
12 years 6 months ago
Al
I always struggle with poems of a political nature. I feel that points can be made far better in a well written essay rather than in poetic form. However, I do think that it can be done if the time period is allowed to attack the words as opposed to the words attacking the time. I think you have a combination of both in this one and that a few additional lines setting the stage would make this one a lot more powerful.
Thanks for the post as I, myself, am waiting at the door for them to knock. I have a few words I would care to share with them.
Scott
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
Al
I had never been very interested in politics, but as I have gotten older I pay more attention to what they are spending our money on and the new laws they are passing or the old ones they are updating or changing, I think you have a good poem I would have liked a little bit more but what is, is :)
I think that our lives are only going to get harder the more they get us into debt the less money and standards of living we will have
love JC xxx