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Leonard
Leonard
Jul 10, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Parrot's Portrait (Haiku)

bright downy feathers
aerodynamic form
freshly painted beak

written: 25/02/2008

— Leonard, Jul 10, 2011

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: IND

Favorite Poets: Apart from Walt Whitman, the poet, there are a range of painters who have made a great impact on my work and life. Painters such as Henri Matisse, Pablo Picasso, Mark Rothko, Vincent Van Gogh and a host of others.

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raj

14 years 11 months ago

nicely done Leonard..i wish

nicely done Leonard..i wish though you could replace the word body to give this more cadence...

Leonard

Leonard

14 years 11 months ago

Thanks Raj

I agree with you . Perhaps - as Gee has suggested - I could use the word "form" instead of "body" but people are sticklers for the 5/7/5 form. Actually, if you check out Haiku writing on the internet, it is not really necessary to stock to the 5/7/5 formula. You could miss out a syllable her and there.

Thanks for the read. I have changed the word to "form".

Cheers ... Leonard

Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

14 years 11 months ago

Leonard

So glad to see an old friend here, enjoyed this haiku from you!

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scribbler

14 years 11 months ago

hello

Enjoyed. Hats off as when I write Haiku I can't seem to stop at just one...............stan

Geezer

Geezer

14 years 11 months ago

I think...

that instead of [body], you could use [form]. This gave me a great picture of a parrot though! ~ Gee

Leonard

Leonard

14 years 11 months ago

Thanks Gee

I agree and have done as you have suggested.

Leonard