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Dec 11, 2012
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Pain
My inner darkness
The glass of the soul
Falling catches no sunlight
Dropping onto black marble
Shattering without sound
Without a sparkle,
Or thrown light.
Never let this be me.
I scream inwardly
No one hears my agony
I touched the darkness
With my whole being
It is a product of a hurt
I have been given to hold
Held so that I cannot breathe
Reflected within myself.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I am fine, I just write sometimes, Yours Ian.T
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Race_9togo
12 years 10 months ago
Hi Ian
I have no critique, just appreciation.
Every time I read this I find myself at some new aspect of pain, and it's disquieting, how succinctly you capture it.
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
Jim
Great to see you visiting, and your comments are much appreciated.
I jot things on notebook and leave them for a while I sorted this
yesterday, Have so much work to do but never seem to get around to it.
At the moment am looking out some of the ones I don't usually write, Thanks again, Yours Ian.T
Rula
12 years 10 months ago
The relief
is that I know you don't have such grief but you
captured it as if real.
It touches !!
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
Rula
Thank you and good that you notice that it isn't me that hurts.
There are many that do hurt so, and it is to say I know.
Thank you for your write I hope that in understanding that it isn't you either.
Take care out there and enjoy life,
Yours as always, Ian.T