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Jul 02, 2026
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Orlando by: nicole rose
This is the first poem where i used a name
But your also the first person i loved
I have many First with you and im so grateful
You gave me emotions i never knew were there
Whenever i look at you i double check my hair
Always gotta make sure you never see me stare
I never knew i could care this much about someone
I never knew i could have this much fun
When im with you everything seems like sunshine and rainbows
You can never know how far my love goes
The amount of times i chose people over you
I believe were stuck like glue
beach ,This poem isn't exactly about the beach
It's about someone I couldn't reach
That poems also about you but i wrote that before i had a clue
How much i would be scared without you
I know its difficult i know its scary
But look at how much we've been through
The struggle its true
There's so much words i could use to describe you
No one knows me better
Listen, no one knows me better
I don't know exactly how to end this
Maybe with a 11:11 wish
You're not gone but I will always miss you.
Thats all i know is true
— Nicole rose, Jul 02, 2026
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Style/Type: Free verse
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
The poem carries genuine emotional sincerity, and a few moments land with real effect. The turn at "beach, This poem isn't exactly about the beach" is the most interesting structural move here — it breaks the fourth wall and pulls the reader into an awareness of the poem's own history, which creates an unexpected intimacy. The closing line, "You're not gone but I will always miss you," also holds a quiet paradox that feels earned.
The main craft challenge is the reliance on rhyme at the expense of precision. Pairs like "fun/someone," "rainbows/goes," and "scary/through" feel pulled toward their end sounds rather than chosen for meaning, which flattens the emotional specificity the poem is reaching for. The feelings described — gratitude, fear of loss, deep familiarity — are real, but phrases like "sunshine and rainbows" and "stuck like glue" are so well-worn that they let the reader coast rather than feel something new. A useful exercise would be to take one of those lines and ask what the speaker actually sees or remembers in that moment — a specific image or gesture — and replace the familiar phrase with that detail. Concrete particulars will do more work than the abstractions currently carrying the poem's weight.
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