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07/26 New Member Contest

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Ode to my love

Shall I compare thee to a summer's day? Or a rose so fair, so wondrous sweet? Or even the peaceful, infinite canopy of the night sky, jeweled with stars?

Nay, for thou art far grander than these.

Thy beauty, both within and without, doth beggar all description

Full faithfully hast thou stood by me through fortune's favor and its bitterest trials,

Indeed, my very life would be an empty vessel devoid of thy presence.

Thou art my first, my last, my constant center, thou art my absolute everything.

I pledge my sacred vow to love, honor and cherish thee unto the very gates of eternity.

Thou art the dawn of my waking thoughts and final prayer before my sleep o'ertakes me.

When sorrow casts me down, the mere melody of thy voice doth lift me high and when joy abounds, thou carriest my spirit far beyond the stars.

When first our paths did cross, little dreamed I could love a mortal soul as deeply as I love thee,

yet my heart surrendered instantly.

The moment thy smile caught mine from across the crowded room, I knew the heavens had declared our bond. 

It was our immutable destiny to fall in love.

Eight and twenty years hence, my love hath only multiplied, so much so that my very soul doth melt at the gentle grace of thy touch.

I cannot conceive of an existence apart from thee. 

Therefore as I humble myself upon one knee.

I beseech thee, wilt thou accept this ring as token of my endless devotion, and dwell with me for all the days of our lives?

May our love stay entangled in every tomorrow we share.

 

— Peter Pearce, Jul 07, 2026

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This was vows i wrote for my wedding, with a tribute to Shakespeare's sonnet 18 in the opening line

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Editing Stage: Final polish

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Geezer

Geezer

1 week 6 days ago

I get that...

 

in order for it to be more in line with the tribute to Willie's sonnet, 
the title reflects the "Ode" theme, but I am a little bit ehhh... 
How about something like: Love #18.

I like the language, it's pretty much flawless, [though being an actor and electrician, probably has something to do with that].

I enjoyed the theme of "love at first sight", the fervor with which you have declared your undying love, and most of all, the continuing theme of adoration. ~ Geezer.

 

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