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tyro
Jun 10, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Oblivious

Anticipation has filled me,
it boils, and it waits release

as my lips begin to tremble,
warmed by heart’s increase.

One touch, my body shudders
in surrender to private bliss,

then soft, moist and loving
I drift oblivious in the kiss

— tyro, Jun 10, 2020

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: The Nederlands

Favorite Poets: William Butler Yates, Wallace Stevens, Giuseppe ungaretti, William Blake

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Lavender

Lavender

5 years 12 months ago

Oblivious

Hi, tyro,
There you, again. You are quite the romantic. I like the build up and anticipation of the moment that leads to 'drift oblivious in the kiss.' A tender and pure write.
Thank you,
L

Rula

Rula

5 years 12 months ago

Dear Tyro

I always believed that to be romantic is one thing, but to express it so well is another thing. What I wanted to say is that you have expressed yourself with words pretty well here. Congrats!!

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tyro

5 years 11 months ago

thank you dear Rula I always

thank you dear Rula I always appreciated your comments.
Now I hate to bring up something so ugly to you, but I wrote a poem a while ago and have wanted to hear what you think.
Its called WAR.

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 12 months ago

What woman...

wouldn't like man to say such romantic things? My wife love it when I say stuff like that! Good job, ~ Geezer.
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