wisecrone2011

Jun 04, 2026 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the challenge:

06/26 A Superhero With Useless Power

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Nobody's Hero

It used to be easy to read peoples'

minds, travel roads, without sight,

find my way through time,

Now, lately,

out of nowhere,

I am going blind.

And, since, I have not,

for such a long time,

used my eyes to see,

They have shriveled,

in their sockets,

rendering them

useless to me.

I am crippled,

in ways,

I never expected,

Before, I could

view the world,

and other,

what I thought to be lesser humans,

with only

my mind,

Never having to be

truly present,

or make an honest,

non intrusive, connection.

I am beginning to see

that my telepathy, was

perhaps, my worst enemy.

My superpower is fading...

I'm nobody's hero,

in any real way,

and

I find myself,

all alone,

in this,

now, unfamiliar place,

I no longer know how to navigate.

— wisecrone2011, Jun 04, 2026

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Sacramento CA USA, USA

Critiques

neopoet

1 day 3 hours ago

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patrickgadoury

1 day 3 hours ago

I love how this starts. The…

I love how this starts. The premise has real teeth: telepathy as avoidance, power as isolation, losing sight as finally being forced into presence. Those first two lines already do what I think the rest needs more of: “It used to be easy to read peoples’ / minds, travel roads, without sight,” has natural sentence-flow with a controlled break, and I wouldn’t change that.

Later, though, the line breaks get too chopped up and the read-aloud rhythm starts to fall apart. For example, “I find myself / all alone / in this / now, unfamiliar place” might hit harder as “I find myself all alone in this, / now, / unfamiliar place.”

The content is there, but the form lets some of the ending go soft.

Geezer

1 day 1 hour ago

Somehow...

I felt a deep connection to this one. Don't worry, we are all broken in some way, but we are family here. We will help you navigate and get the best of your work from you. We have many people that just read our work, never comment and we don't know why. I suspect that they have the same feelings as the rest of us, and just simply don't want or don't possess the skill to write them down. That's okay, I call them the "Secret Readers" I suspect that you will have a lot of both public and secret readers. I agree with patrickgadoury's assessment of the last lines. Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.