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My Lucky Charmer

A whisper of wind, a sunlit, soft sway,
She moves through the world in her own gentle way.
No gilded cage, no tethered, tight string,
With her, I watch joy on unfettered wing.

Like a bird in the sky, she exists ever free,
A spirit untamed, for all eyes to see.
She dances with shadows, she laughs with the light,
And paints every moment in colors so bright.

A clover of four leaves, a wish on a star,
She's more than a symbol, she's near and she's far.
A warmth in the winter, a cool summer breeze,
She brings serendipity, puts my heart at ease.

The world spins and shifts, a tumultuous sea,
But her presence is anchor, stability.
Her smile, a bright beacon, a comforting gleam,
She's woven her magic into life's waking dream.

And when doubts cloud my vision, and shadows descend,
Her hand in my own, a true, loyal friend.
She's more than a charm, more than luck can impart,
She's the beat of my rhythm, the song of my heart.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA the bay state, United Kingdom, Australia, South Africa, Nigeria, Canada, Europe, USA

Favorite Poets: Mary Oliver: Known for her accessible and spiritual poetry that draws heavily on observations of the natural world. She often finds profound lessons and connections in the mundane, from a walk in the woods to the flight of a bird. , Robert Frost: While sometimes seen as a poet of rural life, his work is rich with observations of nature, which he often uses to explore themes of human isolation, choices, and the relationship between humanity and the natural world. , Walt Whitman: A central figure in American poetry, he celebrated nature as a force of unity and a reflection of the human spirit. His work often connects the individual to the vastness of the cosmos and the natural world. , William Wordsworth: A key figure in the Romantic movement, he emphasized the spiritual and emotional connections., Jess Taper: his profess of concentrated awareness of experience in poetry in true freestyle was profound.

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Comments

Candlewitch

1 year 1 month ago

Dear Mark,

I rather think that you are the charmer, with your amazing way with wordsmithing! I loved this. My favorite lines are:

And when doubts cloud my vision, and shadows descend,
Her hand in my own, a true, loyal friend.
She's more than a charm, more than luck can impart,
She's the beat of my rhythm, the song of my heart.

fondly, Cat

Geezer

1 year 1 month ago

For...

the most part, this poem is pretty good, bringing a view of your muse to our eyes. Only problem I see is the [serendipity] line.
Too many beats, which can be fixed by taking out the connecting word, [and]. Nice, light theme, to show your connection with your muse. ~ Geez.
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