My Friend Flicker

A spark igites
and the rest is history.

That lone, single spark
is responsible for it, all!

The laughter, tears, and anger,
depression, giddiness, and regret;

all were each but, a single live-wire.
Once lit, ther is no turning back!

However, it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass

where the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should be holding the flame!

— docmaverick, Aug 01, 2012

About This Poem

Last Few Words: ....and here's yet another, avenue.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

judyanne

13 years 10 months ago

love the title

'were the fire shall burn' - do you mean 'where' doc?

just in my opinion - i think this would work better in quatrains - thoughts seem a little scattered with the couplets....

and
'were each but, a single live-wire' - (again imho) would work better with 'are' instead of 'were'

i really like the concept here doc
'it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass
.... were the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should hold the flame'
- has me thinking

love judy
xxx

Ian.T

13 years 10 months ago

Doc

A moment held in the Now but of yesterday and tomorrow, great write there Doc,
Yours Ian.T