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Jan 18, 2025
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Mr Happy
It's a very simple cup
With " Mr Happy" on it.
A round body
Yellow in colour
Small hands
Small legs
And a very large smile.
It resonated with me
Because of the mood I'm in.
I'm happy
And I'll yell it to the roof tops.
I only have here
I only have only now
And I want to express my joy
At being.
To quote Bruce,
I am enough,
Enough to be joyous
In this moment in time.
This is all I have
And all I wish to have.
I saw that cup
And I smiled
From deep inside of me.
Not only the stillness
Not only the peace
But the sustained satisfaction.
This is what this cup
Represents for me
And about me.
— The Gogetter, Jan 18, 2025
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just a story about me buying a coffee cup at the local opportunity shop, and how it affected me. I was instantly drawn to it, sitting in the tray about to be placed on the shelf with all the other items. It reminded me that I was happy, and that is why I bought it.
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1 year 4 months ago
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Rula
1 year 4 months ago
Hope you
Joy whatever you drink in this cup. As I feel it represents more than a cup. It's a reminder of many good things that one might go through.
Mine is white and with golden big font you can read SELFIE. I admire it too, but never thought to describe it the way you did!
Do you think "satisfaction" might flow smoother than "contentedness" in the last stanza?
Just a suggestion.
Enjoyed reading your raw piece anyway.
Thank you for sharing.
The Gogetter
1 year 4 months ago
Thank you for the word swap
Much appreciated Rula. I will try this. The Gogetter.