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Moonlit
The glow that illuminates my sky
has stretched its arms into this darkened night.
Tonight, I shall not sing
my silk-woven songs for you.
Tonight, I shall not disturb
the tranquility within our silence.
Look at the trees,
blushing quietly beneath one another’s secret gaze,
while above,
the gentle clouds drape themselves in silver shades.
Do you hear?
The moonlit sky and the serene earth
are whispering beneath the silent tides.
Are you listening?
If only I could whisper this into your ears
without disturbing the stillness of this moonlit night,
we could have sat beneath a tree,
finding universes in each other’s eyes.
But the leaves wither,
and the wind sighs.
I look at you by
gazing back into the night sky.
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Lavender
1 week 3 days ago
Moonlit
Hello, tenderleaf,
Such a longing, and such a tender grief beneath it. Quiet and lonely...
Welcome to Neopoet. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you!
Lavender
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