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Kailashana2
Jun 15, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

meditation

it is morning
the night not yet
ascended

in the ocean
whale song
and the river
breathes

there is madness
and survival
death and Afghanistan

I meditate on these things,
life turns over another
page

Love,
You are here with me

the peonies burst with flame.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j0gC4SH1Bqk

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Bokonon: “Let your life be the poem you write”. , I'm still writing.....

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K

Kailashana2

14 years 10 months ago

Thanks dear for your

Thanks dear for your suggestions and reading, but this poem stays as is.

The whale song reverberates, it's a given that whales singing is the cause.

I spoke of 4 separate things in stanza 3.... madness. survival. death and Afghanistan

I rarely use connecting words in the last sentence such as as. ;-) They stand on their own.

All is well in Oz this morning (for me)?

~

K

Kailashana2

14 years 10 months ago

Wellllll....missy!

Wellllll....missy!

You might have given me suggestions that I *would have used*....lol.

Hugs,
~

weirdelf

weirdelf

14 years 10 months ago

oh Anna!

I do not think I have ever seen you make a change to a poem based on feedback. That should make make you my automatic enemy on Neopoet.

You are an arrogant bitch, but a fucking good arrogant bitch. Nee, a lioness.

loved

loved

14 years 10 months ago

LOVELY FINALE FOR A MEDITATION

I meditate on these things,
life turns over another
page

Another occasion
for a fresh meditation
life churns
and turns
to return

loved

loved

14 years 10 months ago

death is no

panacea

fighting for ones right
in this one and only life
gives more pleasure

death is exhaustion
extinction
like eusthania

K

Kailashana2

14 years 10 months ago

Indeed. the spirit is

Indeed. the spirit is willing but the flesh is weak. ;-) I often think, that we are immortal beings and we have programmed ourselves for death until we get the *living* part right.

What do you think?

~A

loved

loved

14 years 10 months ago

GIVE ME TIME

To think
then i will say

Engineered

Heredity
or over ruling
all in its entirety

we live but one life
singularly
so let me be
MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
INDIVIDUALLY
HOPEFULLY
AND
WILFULLY