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the marrow of the moment
The quill of a forgotten moment,
a signature of time upon the sky,
languid white clouds drifting by,
spurs a sharp pain that wouldn't go,
strikes paper filled with imprints,
ink staining along a cracked soul.
The hand moves in quiet rebellion,
scraping against the silence left behind,
words spilling like embers from a fire
long thought extinguished but still breathing,
its warmth aching, its hunger unspent,
spreading across the page like memory unbound.
Each letter carves a reckoning,
a whispered surrender to the weight of thought,
lines bending beneath the force of absence,
threading syllables through veins of ink—
a map to loss, to longing, to all things unnamed,
etched deep into the marrow of the moment.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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10 months 4 weeks ago
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Frederick Kesner
10 months 4 weeks ago
Not surprised nor
Not surprised nor underwhelmed tbh.
Ruby Lord
10 months 4 weeks ago
Hi Cryptic, your poem is
Hi Cryptic, your poem is lyrical and layered, and it moves like smoke through memory and loss. Good job, Ruby xx
Frederick Kesner
10 months 4 weeks ago
Thanks heaps, Ruby; that is
Thanks heaps, Ruby; that is an excellent image about the smoke, most appreciated, :)
Ruby Lord
10 months 4 weeks ago
You're welcome, take care,
You're welcome, take care, Ruby xx
Frederick Kesner
10 months 4 weeks ago
You too Ruby.
You too Ruby.