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Feb 18, 2020
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Marital Bliss
I have been clean shaven
but was a cat's whiskers
even till now
she has tolerated me
our marriage @53
we both are very lucky
save roses says she
now they are so costly
Ah passionate we still can be
Honey your poetry is
shall we say..
lovely
— lovedly, Feb 18, 2020
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: Marital this was inspired as bliss by Jerryk's
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Critiques
Eumolpus
6 years 3 months ago
what a lovely poem, lovedly
just right. (only the mmm is a bit off to me ...maybe ummm, or hmmmm, or better, "shall we say" which would be a nice rhyme to "lovely".
There is much truth behind this poem. Being in that situation, I bless that my wife is not a poet, nor really interested in poetry. (Now she's a photographer, but was an exceptional textile graphic artist, one of the best ). Good lord, two poets in the same bed...how long can that last??
what a nice poem. tight, and original. a great intro. I totally "grok" (as said in Stranger in a Strange Land...I think our generation would remember that!))
lovedly
6 years 3 months ago
Jerry and EUMOL
Thanks you both
raise my collars