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May 29, 2013
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M u l l i o n ...................
Stray twins
astray
askance
paint dreamskins vanillin
late frieght calls down on the
nickel line
cresote and creekwater
restless like a trance
you shiver and stir
a newborn dream
crawling
down the history
ambrosia
up calf ridden inkwork
and hip frame
a whorl of navel
a shadowed breast
wind like the Jin Jin
blows
Ju Ju arrival
and your nest hair
spills
aflame
like a sunken dusk
a treasure glean
while the moon
pearled
annoints
the precious
kiss of midnights
trove
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
Steve
This red head that is torturing your thoughts and writing, hey I have one of those, but the shades are different.
The use of the word vanillin in the line 4 did you mean a colour, I have always assumed that this is a flavour..
Interesting to paint with a flavour though..
The write was deep and sensual, though there again I thought just a tad hard in places, as if regret had crept in and an excuse had to be found..
Just me again, ignore if wrong I have some time on my hands to ponder,
Yours Ian.T