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Oct 07, 2025
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Lotus Flower
Oh, Buddha
suffering grows sweet
when my desires
wither and fade
as my soul
blossoms for
no other reason
but to kiss the sun
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
6 months 2 weeks ago
The only...
thing I might wish for in this write, is the punctuation. I think simply a semi-colon and a comma or two would suffice and rather than interrupting the flow, it would make it smoother by giving the instructions on how it should be read.
Lavender
6 months 1 week ago
Hello, Geezer,
You always give me food for thought, and I appreciate it. With this, it looked and felt weighed down with punctuation. It's actually meant to be one simple thought, hopefully flowing from first word to the last, interpreted by the reader in whatever way it's felt. However, I truly always think over your suggestions, and I will here, too!
Thank you!
L
Words Ablaze
6 months 2 weeks ago
Suffering is sweet isn't it?…
Suffering is sweet isn't it? And the phrase ...kissing the sun ...captures that wonderfully. To long for that which could end u. Thank you for that image.
Lavender
6 months 1 week ago
Suffering...
Hello! It's lovely just to be like the Lotus Flower merging up from the depths of murky water and mud (times of suffering) and blossoming toward the sun.
Thank you!
L