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Obadiah Grey
Obadiah Grey
May 24, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

As of late.

I could wax on the wings of a butterfly - but,
I ain't that kinda o' guy.
rather kick the nuts off bastard squirrels
pull the wings off blue arsed fly.

I'm the stuff that flops off dog chops
when he's up fer it and high,
I'm a metaphor to drink s'more --

I'm the toe nail in the pie.

Obi.

— Obadiah Grey, May 24, 2021

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: int'topfield, GBR

Favorite Poets: Felix Dennis, Brian Bilston,

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Critiques

Triskelion

Triskelion

5 years ago

Jiminy Hoo-hah

I love this, and my eyes teared up a little, but couldn't help but entertain a first line like
"I could wax on the back of a blue-arsed fly" lol!
That could be a real gem with a little work.
Toe nail in the pie...unbelievable

Thomas

lovedly

lovedly

5 years ago

you are so metaphorical

you have made me hysterical
lol
what fun and lovely pun
well in the doing done
length why did you shun
show longer one man
O you are not yet GREY/GRAY
anyway you'd metaphorically say
(w)hoooo ray#
how many$$$$$$
today

Geezer

Geezer

5 years ago

I'm all about...

splashing the audience with a little water on the way back from the washroom, in hopes of getting a little laugh.
[Did he wash his hands?] LoL. A fun little ditty! ~ Geez.
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