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Oct 20, 2025
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It is too depressing
It is too depressing
To talk about death
I don't want to hear anything about
Death
It is too depressing
To talk about the war
It is too depressing to talk
About violence
It is too depressing
Too talk about the homeless
Sleeping in the street
During the Winter
Because the days are shorter
And it gets dark by 5:00 pm
It is too depressing
To talk about the left overs
That we throw in the garbage
That could have gone
To feed the homeless that are
Starving
We should put our selves in the
Shoes of the homeless
Just to feel what is like to be
Homeless
It is too depressing to
Talk about the people that
Have died of Aids
Also we have to remember
That they are gone but not
Forgotten
It is too depressing to talk about
Elder abuse
It is too depressing to talk about
The young women who
Are single mothers trying to raise their
Child own their own
We must understand that it is very hard to be
A single mother
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is a new poem Written by Aldo kraas
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
The poem adopts a repetitive structure, using the phrase "It is too depressing" as a refrain to underscore the speaker's reluctance or societal aversion to confronting difficult topics. This repetition effectively accumulates a sense of emotional weight, mirroring the overwhelming nature of the issues listed: death, war, homelessness, wasted food, AIDS, elder abuse, and the struggles of single mothers. The poem’s cataloguing approach highlights the breadth of suffering that is often avoided in conversation.
However, the poem’s reliance on repetition risks diminishing its impact over time. The repeated phrase, while thematically purposeful, may become monotonous without variation in rhythm, imagery, or tone. Consider experimenting with the structure: varying the refrain or interspersing it with more vivid, concrete imagery could deepen the emotional resonance and sustain reader engagement.
The poem occasionally shifts from observation to direct moral exhortation (“We should put ourselves in the shoes of the homeless”; “We must understand that it is very hard to be / A single mother”). While these lines express empathy, they move toward telling rather than showing. The poem could benefit from more sensory detail or specific narrative moments that allow readers to experience these realities, rather than being instructed on how to feel.
There are several typographical and grammatical inconsistencies (e.g., “Too talk about the homeless,” “Child own their own,” “our selves”), which may distract from the poem’s message. Attention to these details would strengthen clarity and polish.
Overall, the poem’s thematic intent is clear: to confront the discomfort of acknowledging social suffering. To enhance its effectiveness, consider incorporating more concrete images, varying the refrain, and allowing the poem’s emotional core to emerge through specific, lived details rather than general statements.
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