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Owl Has My Soul
Sep 09, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Intention

Beaver.
Takes little bites.
Master creator until...
Tail slaps on twilight surface.
Going home.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I am experimenting with short poems -- they are my training wheels I suppose. I want to learn how to be subtle with imagery and themes

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Canada, BC

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Comments

Jackweb

Jackweb

4 years 7 months ago

A quintain poetry

I love the poetic form here.

Beavers are the second-largest living rodents after the capybaras. semi-aquatic rodents in the genus Castor native to the temperate Northern Hemisphere.

stunning imagery!
(a) Beaver
Takes little bites..

(b) Tail slaps on twilight surface
Going home

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|Owl Has My Soul

4 years 7 months ago

Thank you

Yes - I really like the Cinquain form too. I am happy with the imagery as well. I love the sound of beaver tail slaps on water when I am lucky enough to hear them. Like hearing the call of a loon on a lake. Such a supernatural sound...

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|Owl Has My Soul

4 years 7 months ago

Thanks Mark

Honestly I am intrigued as to what you would suggest for adding advanced punctuation. I would love you to show me how you would do so... I am here to learn after all...

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|Owl Has My Soul

4 years 7 months ago

Okay I see. Like a

Okay I see. Like a reduction to concentrate the flavours. Requires/triggers the readers mind to participate more. Internalize more.