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I'm missing my moon
I'm missing my moon
I wait for the night just to see her
I wonder if she will be shining bright
Or, on the other side
I wonder if she will be blending with the sky
I'm missing my moon
I know she changes her shape
Sometimes she's full of herself
But, if you stare
Sometimes you will notice she's hiding her face
I'm missing my moon
But I know she's always there
Whether I see her fully or partially
She's just in front of me
Whether far away or within a reach
I'm missing my moon
I wait for the night just to see her
Because she's everything I need to feel
And, specially
Because it's the only time I can fully breath
I'm missing my moon
She's the one to give me name and sense
Without her my thoughts and feelings are a mess
All day I miss my girl
Without her I don't have myself
About This Poem
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Critiques
Jamie
3 days 21 hours ago
I’ve felt this before. Hard…
I’ve felt this before. Hard place to be. Good writing
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