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Ikebana

Ikebana…

What order do you restore
in my tormenting life,
gaining my most trusted love.
Around you discipline
emanates with ease,
contenting carefully.

Your talent turns troubles away
peace unconsciously conveyed,
time will heal you state.
Perfect actions seem to
carry the hour with a worth,
driving home the cut.

Within your reason there’s
no rush, your voice calm
but firm, so silences
those with doubt.
Pruning such painful edges
that try to obscure feelings,
returning me from fret’s frown.

— Roscoe Lane, Mar 18, 2011

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Foresting a life saver, with such a careful style..

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Scotland, Ayrshire land of Burns.., GBR

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Critiques

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

15 years 2 months ago

Thank you,

Thank you for your comments, i can't change a you suggested. What i mean in that line is you state, as in a persons statement. Time will heal you state. Hope thats clear. Regards Roscoe..

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 2 months ago

wow ROSCOE!

and there I thought you were speaking of some beautiful Japanese-type lady!
Good write!
Boni

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

15 years 2 months ago

Maybe,

Maybe a subliminal message, thank you for your comment. Regards Roscoe..