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If Time Listened To Me
Rewriting Memory
if time listened to me
I’d ask it to give me more time
so that all the happy memories feel strong longer
and last longer
to the point my soul would feel sublime
if time heard my reasons
then all the melancholic days would be a blast
everything sad would then be on the upside
with great vibes
making each moment better than the last
if time and I sat down and talked
I’d be more aware of each passing second
so that young me would hear my voice
and make a better choice
for the ones that I now regard and reckon
if time would just listen to me
every memory would be captured in art
for the sad ones and the good ones
for everything I was once
I carry them written in my heart
About This Poem
Last Few Words: NaPoWriMo2026 Day 30
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Critiques
Candlewitch
4 weeks ago
Dear Wally,
I like the way you have taken the concept of time and personified its existence! I also enjoyed reading what your conversation would be like... hopefully "Time" would listen to your request of intensity in the experience. Also prolong your enjoyment of each moment! A right ripping piece of work!
fondly, Cat