Rula

May 06, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

From the ICU

Pillows pack the pain
Dizziness controls the brain
Blue curtains domain.

— Rula, May 06, 2018

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

Critiques

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

Smiles to you too

Mark. Have been in the icu for a couple of days after a bad chest-pain. Much better now. Editted as suggested.
Thank you for your kind visit.

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

same is here

Mark( a second heart attack ) Hope all is better with you now. I never thought of the hospital as a good place, EVEN IF I need it.
Lol..I like human pin cushion

raj

8 years 1 month ago

Mark and Rula

both of you please take best care.
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tyro

8 years 1 month ago

Dear Rula

Dear Rula
In my mind you are a symbol of goodness. I have witnessed your kind heart so many times.
My your God hold you dear.

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

Thank you

dear friends. Your kind words make me feel much better indeed no matter what!
Appreciate it!

IRiz

8 years 1 month ago

I hope you feel better, and look at you, creative soul! you managed to give a poetic spin to your pain. Congratulations on having a perfect Zen reaction to the unfortunate event.
I wish you a blessed spring days and full recovery.

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

dear IRiz

I wanted to record/date the moment even that it IS as you call it an unfortunate event.
Bless you.
Thanks for the kind visit

scribbler

8 years 1 month ago

lol

They always ask how you are whether at Dr.s office or hospital. I always reply I'm not excellent or I'd not be here lol. Like your Haiku......stan

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

Totally

agree Stan. Hope you are feeling better.
Thanks for the visit.

alidzain

8 years ago

Salam, Rula

I thought this is senryu. Now I'm confused. Which is the one which is about nature and which is about human? Maybe you can help refresh my memory abit.

Alid

Rula

8 years ago

Salam Khalid

Great to hear from you. It's been a long time since I last read you. I hope all is good.
Yes, I believe the haiku is meant for the nature and the senryu for the human. I've changed the title without referring to any of these. Just expressing the feeling of the moment.
Thank you for the kind visit.