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Aug 27, 2018
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Hummingbird Speak
Hummingbird speak,
How fast are your wings?
What is your name?
This one met me face to face.
This one looked me in the eyes,
I asked again with a smile,
How fast are your wings?
What is your name?
I wish to take your pic,
create nature vid
This one stayed and played
Hummingbird speak..
— Barbara Writes, Aug 27, 2018
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
Rula
7 years 10 months ago
Hello Barbara
always great to see you with your lovely voice. Ah humingbirds! They've always fascinated me as well. I have never seen one face to face though.
I found the last stanza a bit ambiguous re who is the speaker.
Maybe adding some punctuation might solve the ambiguity?
Or it might be just me?
Barbara Writes
7 years 10 months ago
Thanks for reading
The last line does seem ambiguous. I’ll reword as hummingbird speak.
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