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scribbler
May 14, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

HEAVY AIR

Still, hardly a single breath of air
Till distant thunder grumbles
Omen of what the clouds will bear
Racing as they build and tumble.
Moisture falling everywhere.

— scribbler, May 14, 2016

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Dis you see it for an acrostic first time through?

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

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scribbler

10 years ago

H Rula

Plain acrostics aren't my favorite type poetry so when I Do write one I add a bit of challenge by making it rhyme. Thanks for the read and comment......stan

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scribbler

10 years ago

hello Jane

Thank you. I appreciate your time to read and comment.......stan

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

10 years ago

this picture

of a dry spell coming to a sudden end in a hearty cloudburst is one that can be appreciated by many living in varying and different areas of the world but not Scotland where rain is never far away.

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scribbler

10 years ago

Hi Kieth

I suspect you get tired of scraping moss out of your ears lol. Appreciate your visit.........stan

judyanne

judyanne

10 years ago

good acrostic Stan

And short and sweet - another just like me :-)

Can I suggest you change the last line to read simply 'moisture falls' ??

Love judy
xxx

mand

mand

10 years ago

Hi STan

I second all the above comments. ( that's what you call a lazy comment ) Lol

You hit the spot for me on this one - I love thunder storms and the electrifying atmosphere!

Love Mand xxx

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scribbler

10 years ago

Hey Mandy

I've ridden out one tornado in my life and we had a hail storm so heavy the other afternoon that it looked like it had snowed the following morning. I also love storms.........stan